Starting March 1, a new policy will start RHH having open campus lunch. The policy is being put into place because of “phenomenal test scores.”
The town of Rock Hill will be receiving a new super Walmart in May 2006. The town is been such a great community, that they can know handle to Walmart. Community members feel that it could be a bad idea because or hurt local business.
At RH School, student (also sixth-grader) Napoleon Dynamite has been tested and approved as a genius. He will be moved to the rock Hill high school immediately so he doesn’t waste any time in middle school. The principal believes that the move will help to him get to medical school earlier and be better prepared.
In Baltimore yesterday, the survey was released by the child abuse prevention center. The survey says 3 to 4 children die every day United States child abuse or neglect it. The number of child-abuse cases has risen 2.6 million last year to 2.7 million this year.
Homeowner Kathy Mahoney was awaken by the smoke and flames coming from her house. The fire caused $76,000 in damages to the home. Officials said that the fire was started by a lighted cigarette laid down on the sofa. The firefighters had the blaze under control in five minutes.
Good job
It sounds good, though it would be better if you could use more complex sentences to allow more info per sentence.
Maybe work on a different flow.
Not good! Not great! Absolutely beautiful!
Great job 🙂
This is really good, you explained pretty thoroughly but not to much information was put in, that is good.
Be sure your writing is as concise as possible. No extra words.
Yours-
The town of Rock Hill will be receiving a new super Walmart in May 2006. The town is been such a great community, that they can know handle to Walmart. Community members feel that it could be a bad idea because or hurt local business.
Mine-
A new super Wal-mart will open in May 2006. This alarms some community members because it could hurt other local businesses.
Also, watch for basic capitalization and use active voice.